Nice stuff Bruce. Deep, but easy to get the message. Kind of like clockwork orange meets Norman Bates after he just got done stabbing her in the shower. he he he

You have that stuff down. Now is the time to incorporate your feelings I think. It will never so realistically leap from the "stupid inside voice" onto your paper as it will right now.

Of course, if we all go our separate ways to write stories then when will we find time to write on here?

In the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years.
Abraham Lincoln

It is hard to fail, but it is worse never to have tried to succeed.
Theodore Roosevelt