I'll need to tone down the religious parts, that won't work and yes, remove some of the rhetoric but I still think there needs to be one last throw of the dice. No?
As long as you can do it with NO EXPECTATIONS, re-read GB editorial, he says this won't work. However if you want to send it, OK, it lets her know one last time where you stand.
I agree it is to wordy, cut out some of the words.
