I agree with gan about the "scraps" sending a resentful as a message. But, in general it looks good. Just bullet points to address practical issues.
One thing that translate to me is that there is no transferring trouble for her, and that is probably a big one for her once she reads the email. Most of what you wrote seems just business like.
Hope she can see that you are being very reasonable and trying to deal with the situation with a friendly disposition.
