I think its to the point, but the one line "I am a great father, a great husband, and a wonderful and willing man. Mostly I am human." This seems defensive. I'm sure its only meant as getting across a point of view but I don't know that it serves any real purpose. I don't know her so I don't know her reaction to that, but I'm sure you do.
M: 43 W: 43 Married 6 yrs. T: 7 yrs. Son 20, 18, 17, 15 yrs. (w/ Autism), 12, 10