Originally Posted By: MrBond
Too wordy. I'd keep it short and sweet.


Any particular reason? What part(s) would you take out? Have you read my story or just making a general comment?

M:28 | W:28 | T:4.5 | M:2.5 | No Children
EA1 Uncovered: Jun 2011
EA2 Uncovered: 2011-09-29
S: 2011-09-29
I'm moving on: 2012-05-08
My story: http://bit.ly/K3ttPM