Be very careful in that heat BBJ. People get heat stroke that way. Lots of water!
Honestly, I love everything you wrote. Definitely show it to your C and then.......I'm such a devil.....I'd send the danged thing! No edits...send it! Don't EVER edit your own feelings.
Being someone who has been lurking from the East coast and following you and your sitch for some time, I don't find anything wrong with what Mishka has suggested.
There's a Helen Reddy song that is very appropriate:
