Hi. I need to collect the rest of my things. I'm planning to do that next saturday AM. It will take less than 15 minutes. Please, let me know if this is ok with you.
We also need to agree on a date and time to close our joint bank account. This is less urgent, but I'd like to I appreciate if we could find the time to do this within this month.
Thank you.
Remove the comma after "please." Comes across too supplicating.
