Sounds pretty good...I like what Puppy did above...highlighting the pronouns...keep the blinders on like Allen said- great advice, wish I heard that back in the day.
BTW- I would like to speak w/ you candidly about your profession...are you on the alt? (FB)
Please let me know-
Good job not making a stink about the ring- my W pulled hers out once, and I made a comment...it hasnt been on her finger since...thank goodness the reason is "it doesnt fit anymore" instead of oh I'm bangin OM now and dont feel a bit of guilt...lol