You're right, of course, about the length. Guess I was trying to say everything, which is w-a-y too much.
LOL, maybe he wouldn't get the song reference, but there is nothing morbid or defeatist about it really. The singer is talking about how this is the last effort he will make for the one he loves and then he's moving on. I thought he would get the idea since we both love oldies music...never saw it the way you did. One of many reasons I apply for editors.
By saying he's not my husband I guess I'm trying to convey that this is not a marriage, not a relationship. Yeah, the law says we're married, but that doesn't make him my husband. And love, IMO, has nothing to do with emotion. Love is a commitment. Being a husband and wife is very different than just living in the same house. He can't have me as his wife, with all the responsibilities and fringe benefits that go along with that until he is ready to be a husband - including all of the responsibilities and perks that go with the job description. So how can I rephrase to get that point across?
Because right now, no, he isn't my husband. He's just some guy I live with.
undefeated 24 H 24 S's 4, 2, 1 M 5 yrs
"Most of the important things in the world have been accomplished by people who have kept on trying when there seemed to be no hope at all." ~Dale Carnegie
