not that you asked for it dmk but the letter needs to be trimmed back for sure. If it was a girl --> girl letter that would be great, but that is not the case. Us guys ..we need lots of white space on the page ..fewer words. just the mars/venus thing I reckon as for the reason.
I presume your intention is for him to read the whole thing and although I do not know him or much at all of your sitch ..the gender connection allows me to not go our too far on a limb to say it has to be edited for brevity and made simple for the audience it is intended for ..a guy. Other wise less than 1% will be given much of a look by him.
Had this post been to a guy, I would have had to practice what I preached, but the posts always have the illusion (to me anyway) of seeming much longer until I hit submit.
