Wow, I know you may not be able to see it but I actually see a lot of positives, he has told you what what the problems are. Why don't you make that paragraph into a list and then write how you can do something differently. I really think that will give you a great starting point. I'd be really interested to see them posted but understand if you don't want to.
Honestly I am not just being positive for the sake of it. I really see potential in your situation, if I didn't I just wouldn't say anything.
