I like it. As I said before, I generally like to keep it simple w/as few words as possible, so I'd change the last paragraph to just; "You don't have to answer right now, just something to consider" & leave it at that.
My feeling is that if you have too much you're trying to convey, it comes out sounding scripted, plus has the potential of putting something in that might not work to your advantage.
I also think she'll pipe in with something along the way & it might change the message. I don't know her like you do though & if the text is an example, she won't be big on words.
