Final version

[JR2007]

Can you add something in there about what you hope will happen in the future? Or is that the next letter?

Otherwise it's very touching. You're obviously feeling some of her pain and seeing things from her POV.

[JR2007]

Can you add something in there about what you hope will happen in the future? Or is that the next letter?

I don't know that there will be a next letter. I just want her to know I've thought it through and I take responsibility now.

Then add it. Let her know you hope you can work on things together, as equalt partners, as you know you should have been all along. Let her know she won't be coming back to the same old crap, but that life can and will be as she's dreamed it could be in your relationship, as she thought when you got married. Something like that, no begging, just let her know it'll be WAY better.

[789]

It is very well written, it shows alot of courage to put that all down in writing. Hoping the best for you Jazz.

[JR2007]

Mmmm...I don't know. I don't want to put any pressure on her. That letter was intentionally written to

* invoke some good memories
* take responsibility for my actions
* let her know I get it
* make clear how awful I feel

That's really it. I don't expect or even want her to react to it at this point. I just want to plant a seed and let her process things.

It'll do that.

[NMHurting]

Yup agreed. It is a fantastic piece of work Jazz. Good luck.

[AmyC]

There is no explaining the eventual emptiness and ugliness of the bar scene. It’s something people have to experience for themselves and burn out on before they can truly settle down. I was wrong again.

Remove this.
It is too presumptuous.
Hook "but they're not" to the last sentence in the previous paragraph.

Lose that last line.

[AmyC]

Okay, whatever but it doesn't fit in the letter.

Yes, not everyone burns out on bars.

Some people are mature enough to manage themselves properly.

That statement does not apply to musicians (meaning you're there night after night and more than likely, IT manages you).

I know exactly where your perspective is coming from.
It just doesn't apply to the general population.

Newsflash: I did my time in the bars and have known more musicians than you might have immediately thought .

[AmyC]

In fact, I'm pretty sure that's why I find you to be such a cute little sh*thead!

[AmyC]

You don't have that power.

[mkultra]

How will she read it? Just wondering? I hear people cannot resist reading mail in an envelope.